Its Great to be me Because i like to do thing like play games and sports i like playing sports because i love being active and getting our there and like to try and stay active and fit.
My name is Ryan and I'm from Karoro school in Greymouth. I read about the things that you like to do like play sports and games. I like how you talked about the things that you like to do when you want to. I also like playing sports as well like basketball,hockey and touch.
I like that when you use words like active and fit and you have the motivation to do those things. I see that you like to be an active runner and try to stay outside and be an energetic person. I hope you stick to what you say on your writing. Like playing outside games, running around and being energetic. You use great words to make your writing supportive and talked about what you want to this was a great piece of writing.
Next time you could use bigger writing so you can see what you're writing because the words are just too small and also use more colors than red and just white to make it stand out.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Affonso,
My name is Ryan and I'm from Karoro school in Greymouth. I read about the things that you like to do like play sports and games. I like how you talked about the things that you like to do when you want to. I also like playing sports as well like basketball,hockey and touch.
I like that when you use words like active and fit and you have the motivation to do those things. I see that you like to be an active runner and try to stay outside and be an energetic person. I hope you stick to what you say on your writing. Like playing outside games, running around and being energetic. You use great words to make your writing supportive and talked about what you want to this was a great piece of writing.
Next time you could use bigger writing so you can see what you're writing because the words are just too small and also use more colors than red and just white to make it stand out.